From “Growing Sentences with David Foster Wallace”.

Start with the theme:

“Mario had help with his movie. He did a lot of the work himself.”

Stuff in some interrupting modifiers and absolute constructions, a sensible ratio of unnecessary adverbs, the odd elaboration … and you should have something like:

“It’s obvious someone else had a hand in the screenplay, but Mario did the choreography and most of the puppet-work personally — his little S-shaped arms and falcate digits are perfect for the forward curve from body to snout of a standard big-headed political puppet — and it was, without question, Mario’s little square Hush Puppies on the H^4’s operant foot-treadle, the Bolex itself mounted on one of the tunnel’s locked lab’s Husky-VI TL tripods across the over lit closet, mops and dull-gray janitorial buckets carefully moved out past the frame’s borders on either side of the little velvet stage.” 

http://kottke.org/09/03/growing-sentences-with-david-foster-wallace

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